Saturday, May 18, 2013

Headphones


Here’s the thing about headphones, the mere presence of them seems to put random strangers at ease. Few people stop consider if there’s actually any audio coming through those little buds. Their guards go down, and they forget that you even exist.

Headphones have proven very useful while gathering observations in the Sweetwaters coffee shop.

Thus far, I’ve heard a set of parents counseling their potential (perhaps future? I couldn’t quite be sure if the youth had already committed to Eastern or was simply on a tour) son about the benefits of campus life and some of the downsides. Nearby, two professors talked about an upcoming faculty event. Meanwhile, across the way, a gaggle of co-eds commanded the massive gathering table, laughing uproariously.

It was a neat thing to pay silent spectator to these very human, everyday moments. And then as these patrons left more filtered in to take their place. The cycle began anew. Only this time the two customers nearest me began sharing far too many annoying details about their lives that I did finally begin playing some music. That’s the other good part about headphones; they make for a quick escape route.

Observations are going quite well, it’s only this business of actually compiling them into a coherent thesis to generate a paper that eludes me. I might try focusing on how the coffee house (located just east of the legendary water tower within the new section of storefronts that did not exist perhaps three years ago) plays host to a wide variety of people for a number of reasons. Studying, gossiping, inking leases, I’ve seen it all so far. But that doesn’t really provide a lot of mileage.

Or I might play with the evidence that the staff seem to genuinely enjoy their time spent at work in the coffee house. I’ve seen them end a shift and then return less than an hour later just to hang out while their coworkers continue working. On one such occasion, a barista returned with three bowling pins and then began juggling them. He put on a show for his coworkers and the patrons, even balancing one on his face before we began to applaud. It must be the caffeine.

Only that would almost seem cruel. I get the sense, as a former general manager in the industry (albeit not coffee), this establishment can’t be making all that much. I’ve found myself wondering how much longer they’ll stay open. It seems to me that they’re one slightly closer Starbucks (with a drive-thru) from closing their doors for good. While I have seen some curious, even entertaining moments, I’ve also more often been one of only two or three customers in the store for hours at a time.

Could I be writing a paper about a community shuddering its last dying breath?

Monday, May 13, 2013

On Revisions

I've come to the disturbing realization that my current manuscript has an unsatisfactory ending for at least one of the point-of-view characters. My girlfriend recently read the entire novel as it exists today, near 700 pages and only missing the final three chapters, and her criticisms confirmed for me something that has always been gnawing on my self doubt: it's just not strong enough for every major character.

Some characters have enormous payoffs (albeit rather dark): Jaycen Tallart's story of a young thief stealing to build a better life for his family ends with the murder of his sister, the very person he had worked so hard to provide for; Wer dan'Nun and his race of people enter into a wary alliance with the "bad guys," making sure that the reader won't know who to root for. But others, like Raquel in particular, are far too dark or simply just fall flat.

Another 50,000 words will be needed, with perhaps 20,000 of some of the existing content in need of cuts or dramatic revisions. Oh joy...